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"3 C"
by loren

CONTROVERSY , CONTRADICTORY , CONSPIRACY.

You came into my life and played with my feelings….

It was controversy.

You used to say that you loved me.

It was contradictory.

You left me with broken heart…..

Its was conspiracy.

Now I would say….

The most hate sentence has been change with the suggestion of ma gs frinds.....

So Two Pairs of fingure for you...

Date Submitted: Jun 26, 2009 (03:12 PM)

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Queen of the A...

11/20/09 (11:55 AM)

I liked this poem. The concept was original and I really thought it was good. I'm not sure what the last line means but I'm sure it goes because this is your poem, and if you didn't want it in here, you would have left it out. Good poem.

Remy82

06/26/09 (05:42 PM)

That last line kind of throws it off. The rest was really good though. I would even say just leave off the last two lines and you got a good one right here. This is your piece though so i can't tell you how tou feel or felt but i can say from reading it that the last two lines removed would make this hot!

stranger

06/26/09 (05:33 PM)

It was going strong until you lost it... better to learn from the poem about life if you can't learn from life to put in the poem ... Hey it's only my view... we all get angry sometime I guess , and you said it but without grace or elegance ... sooner or later there comes reluctance and understanding, then you might want to come back and write the ending... but hey, wadda I know about your life ? [come to think of it that might be the point as well] a nice song that imho needs a resolution... ...
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Lady_Style

06/26/09 (04:20 PM)

The hatred bounced outta this poem, but i do gotta say, i really don't agree with the last line..but jus as everyone else has said..it's your poem...other than that it was a good write

s0uth3rn g1rl

06/26/09 (04:01 PM)

my bad i said the line was pretty good, i meant the poem

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