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"A Cool Breeze"
  by Luvlee


Felt tipped marker
Blue faded jeans
The setting is so serene
As I sit and write out my dreams
From the past, present, and future
This image appearing out of the water isn’t her
I discovered me about a year ago
But somehow in the mix she went afloat
And now the remnant of a dream is left
But I figure if I put all pieces together
And take my time
I’ll figure out once again the answer to Who am I?
Halfway insane in the cranial membrane
Lost amongst the ocean of saints
I throw my stick in the pond
And with my feet paddle on
Until I find her
She’s a rock and a lily pad hop away
I’m sure I’ll find her today
Amidst the cool breeze and gentle steez of the end of summer
The waters once again become still
And the image of her reappears
I smile

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Date Submitted: Sep 24, 2009 (02:28 PM)
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  Poetry Love
11/20/09 (03:10 PM) 
My, my poet. Your vivid words left my mind in a whirlwind of emotion that found its way to a canvas of beautiful hues. I was moved and pleased.

  blakkrose
11/18/09 (10:38 AM) 
Reminds me of a chica neqra version of "MidSummer Niqht's Dream," except the love she's tryinq to find is herself. In much aqreement with blackpoet. The imaqey was beautifully descriptive, serene feelinqs surfaced throuqhout this piece indeed, like a dream of coll breezes in a place within yourself, OUTSIDE of yourself. Lovely piece Lady Luvlee. One love

  ButterflyDream
11/13/09 (06:56 PM) 
Oh,I am loving this one luvlee!so serene and beautiful,I completely fail into the thoughts and picture you painted.nicely done:)

  ThepureBlackpo...
11/12/09 (03:34 PM) 
Wow, very beautiful imagery painted with such simple words but yet a beautiful delivery. I enjoyed every word down to the very end....Job well done...This had me a with a gentle smile.....

  big josh
10/08/09 (01:18 PM) 
aww well I hope one day u will find the woman inside o fyou and let her shine with the sun

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