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"A Sudden Subtraction"
  by Cedez


U were the person I laughed wit
The person I shared all my secrets wit
When I was alone or depressed you were there
You were there when nobody seemed to care
In only a short piece of time ur gone
People tell me don't worry he's in a better place now
You had no control over ur untimely demise
You were just a sudden subtraction
Shot after shot
I wish I had forgot
The blood pours from your head
I wake up in the morning and they tell me your dead
How could someone do this to u?
How could they do this to me?
I love you I miss you
I cry everytime I think about it
I even cry now as I type these very words about you
I need you in my life
I gotta have you in my life
Come back to me....please
I hate you for leavin me
Yet I still love you at the same time
I tell myself you had no control over your untimely demise
You were just a sudden subtraction
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Date Submitted: May 07, 2008 (09:40 PM)
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  amoeba
09/10/09 (11:48 AM) 
iyo!!!!!!!!sudden subtraction that alone is deep.reminds me the pice i wrote what i lost. i know where you were when you did thid.to nice a piece

  Q. Storm
08/12/09 (09:51 PM) 
The title of this poem captured me from the beginning. The intensity of this poem is very strong. I could almost hear your anger through the words. The story of the death was very vivid and painted a picture without too many words.

  Shanta`
02/25/09 (03:10 PM) 
good write girl ...i loved the title ...i love titles of poems ...for some reason and this was in the mourning category which i believe your expressions in this piece gave exactly what was required ...i can really relate been here done this lol but subtraction only made me stronger ...

  YNNAiRA
02/22/09 (11:49 AM) 
i feel you on this piece i been there before. 10 stars

  ddubb
02/14/09 (04:02 PM) 
Hey there- This was excellent! The title basically drew me toward this piece. It foreshadowed the emotion that was inevitably in this poem. It was also short and sweet letting the audience feel your emotion from the first line. I also liked the repitition in "You had no control over your untimely demise, you were just a sudden subtraction." One of my favorite from you. Thanks for sharing! Peace Across

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