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"Critical"
  by Will charles


Vital signs are low
Rapidly slowing pulse
Difficulty breathing
Heart rate slowly decreasing
Call me an E.M.T
Tell them to hurry
This is an emergency
My hearts in need of surgery
I'm beyond critical
Timing is crucial
I need a doctor to operate
Before it is too late
Time is of the essence
Dying with every second
This is urgent
Now I hear the sirens
In the back of the van I go
Rushed to the nearest hospital
Please stop the pain
Shoot me up with everything
It hurts so damn bad and
I dont wana feel a thing
None of its working
My hearts still hurting
Now I'm slowly losing consciousness
How is it that I got like this
White lights shinning bright as stars
As I'm being pushed thru the E.R
Then on to a table
My status unstable
Can't stop the bleeding
My heart is draining
They're losing me
They try to revive
But I gave up the fight
I see no reason to stay alive
So I close my eyes
And imagine my demise
I'm here cus she did this to me
I'm dying of a broken heart you see
Even if I fought and made it to recovery
My heart will be on life support for eternity
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Date Submitted: Dec 03, 2008 (10:50 AM)
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  TSMALLSz
06/07/09 (02:10 AM) 
damnnnn like i dont even know what to sayy but i was into it.. endin was crazyy.. i love your style your writin is madd deep the imagery is crazyy.. i love it

  Ms. Smith
01/03/09 (10:59 AM) 
thats a serious heartbreak...can't say i haven't been there...really felt your emotions in this...

  Fifikins
12/24/08 (02:00 AM) 
Ending is CRAZY...I digg = D

  Samanthar
12/11/08 (05:08 PM) 
i remember you sendin me this one. i must say it is one of my favorites. The way you wrote it keeps the reader anxious to know what happens. 10 and fav'd

  La-La16
12/11/08 (04:05 PM) 
wow...thiz wuz really good ...it happenz but ya kno ya gotta pick up the piecez...fix your heart and showcase it..so that the next girl can take it and love you like no other 10 starz -lala-

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