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"Criticism"
  by koolaiid


criticism is all i get from you
even when i've helped you do this and that
it hurts hearing it all from you
because you're someone close to me

criticism is something i've never expected from a person like you
you use to b my hero, when i was young
i would always say that when i would grow up
i'd b and end up just like you

but i guess times have changed because you're not a hero of mines anymore
you're just an old, pathetic criticizing ass whore
now that i'm 15, i've wonder
"how would it feel like to have a loving and caring father"

but in my mind thats not possible to even think
because you're not a friend of mines, you're an enemy
criticism from you, i'm so tired of hearing it
i never get a thank you

yes you're the parent but you act as if you're my master
and i'm the slave
like you're the king
and i'm just a dusty little maid

is that what i am to you
because you treat me as if i am
criticism was never an issue till now
skip it, if cats and dogs say it but you

when i first heard you speak a mean remark
it was hard for me to think, was that him
was that my daddee, my father
the man i looked up to

maybe its that you don't like me because i'm different from other asian kids
you expect too much from me
but look, you gotta know, if i could b the daughter you wanted me to be
i would grant that wish to you in a quick second

but i'm not a genie
i love you no doubt but the criticism has to stop
because it's like you don't respect me
Just.......no more criticism from you plz
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Date Submitted: Aug 17, 2008 (11:47 PM)
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  Juciy
09/14/08 (05:16 PM) 
Criticisim coming from people who are closest to you is always the hardest. My dad be the same way and sometimes he do take it too far. but I know that if he cant accept me for who I wanna be then Im not going to waste my time trying to be what he wants me to be. but keep ya head up n never stop writin.

  ash_g
08/30/08 (01:34 AM) 
i can relate do dis lil mama...i know how dis shit go..this was a good write..keep ya head up.10*z

  Prezz
08/20/08 (07:52 PM) 
People wont always accept you for who you are...Whether it be family or friends..or just people you know...You are who you are...no one can change that about you...If 1 cant see, then another will see a quality in you that no one else has.

  smooch
08/19/08 (04:01 PM) 
people change and sometimes its fucked uop bacause they turn on you damn this i can relate too and it hurts when ya parents are the one who does it

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