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"Down Fall"
  by KiNg-Go0B3r
  - This Poem is a response to the poem Falling Down by Planted Daisies






this is my down fall
i watch the crown fall
i been hit hard
the ground walked
im smashed by the asphault
smacked by the ash
felt the spalsh of the sad salt
my wounds just melt
as i rest from the bad assault
out casted
my people tell me that they've had it
throwing rock at my casket
telling me to climb in
use this to my advantage
my throne is broken
my staff is halved
like my pride
they grab
they shove
they stab
they curse my name
and no longer praise worship to the fallen king
they spit at my ring
inventing gadgets to toss as i leave
i heal quickly
but the scabs sting
and the open gashes bleed
the whip lashes
i collapse
pressure making my back bend
the howls sound like deep rooted passion
they're expressions kick me while im passing
bare foot
im steppin on my souls broken glasses
dirt on my face
i cant see through the scratches
arms motionless
restrained by invisible jackets
im wandering
just trying to find where the path is
almost made it
my hand on the pad
they throw a shot
its their last
down i fall
with a crash
i saw no signs
heard no soft discussion
my kingdom was sound
but it was interrupted
my subjects were loyal
thought they could be trusted
my instincts were wrong
as well were my judgements
long live the king
.....forever disgusted.....

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Date Submitted: Jul 06, 2009 (11:00 PM)
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  Ladyoflyrics
07/09/09 (06:57 AM) 
another good drip of ink....

  Planted Daisie...
07/08/09 (07:30 PM) 
this was an amazing piece....never though it would be a response from my scribe....for a king to feel that his actions can become his greatest down fall and his instincts hold no weight in his eyes.....it was a great scribe to read, glad my words came of inspiration....nicely penned.10*

  Brokenvegtable
07/07/09 (10:59 PM) 
the hurt caused can sometimes brign around a new change or resurect a new beginning and through that things can be understood that once were unable to be heard ..... some one once told me that its not that you listen to the wrods being spoken but that you understand why someone is speaking those words to you ..... it can make a big difference to see through anothers eyes .... to feel their pain to know their hardships ..... the so called walk in another mans shoes.... i took my time to read this...
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  Duice
07/07/09 (12:26 PM) 
BRING ME SOME OF THAT FUCK'N HEAT NEXT TIME!!!! Ahhhhhhh!!! Great scribe, faved it with 10's.

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