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"Exhale.."
  by Sirens.Soul


Words fading into watercolor
Misting rain, drizzles and fades
Puddles ripple, hiding the sorrow
Of the sparrow that lays in the gutter-
Dying..

Colors vibrate..glorified golden sheen
Downy feathers chested decreases staccato
As her tiny heart stops its fluttering-

Glancing down at this agitated state-
His wings surround her still body,
As a veil over a bride's face-

A radiance as life breathed-
Inhaled by His redeeming nature..
Soaking in His love-
Exhale..

Flushed heartbeat..
Words fade as colors vibrate
Once more..
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Date Submitted: Jul 03, 2009 (09:39 PM)
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  Rukiya Faizah
07/05/09 (01:07 PM) 
Very stong poem - on so many levels ... I'm reading this and feeling like "Wow". The imagery was strong, your word choice flowed well, and the delivery is just beautiful. I will be reading this one again and fav'in it.

  Mints
07/05/09 (12:57 PM) 
Yo this is definitely a powerful poem with a lot of meaning i can really feel where you coming from on this poem and it just had a great flow to it that not to many can duplicate but yea check ya boi writes out when you get a chance iight gone

  Ghost Monkey
07/04/09 (03:27 PM) 
WOAH. I'm just amazed at the power and sorrow in this wonderful poem. The intricate way you weave the words and lines to form imagery that is unbound is simply, amazing.

  BlessedOne
07/04/09 (02:43 PM) 
When I finished reading this, I said that it sounded like a story of salvation. Then looked at the category and saw it labeled under spiritual. Wonderful story.

  Duice
07/04/09 (08:54 AM) 
That's a brilliant use of imagery you displayed in this piece, it spoke volumes into different happenings of life. In the first stanza I would change "fade" into something else so the word doesn't repeat. 10 stars

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