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"Eyes Open (H H searching 5 word pic challenge)"
  by Tpoet
  - This Poem is a response to the poem Eyes Open (H H searching 5 word pic challenge) by Group: Heaven's Haven


Failing hearts tread rains fall
As pervasive eyes hear feet trip through solid air waves
Of transferred thought leaving bodies vacant
Soulless vessels walking upside down
Trying to breath through feet’s soles
Wondering why hands blister and split
Fingers cramping as lightheaded visions
Reveal grounded hopes searching eyes want to be more yet less
Less of your misplaced intent forcing me to
Redirect these affront words dragging
Tongues across rough hearts that sat on the tip of my lashes
Fighting the monsoon that hovers below my head
Wishing for a rising tide that cover ears
So eyes can’t see the sound of these disapproving stares
As I perusal into my eyes third eye looking at you be me be you
While we pretend to be someone else
It’s unequivocally time to find myself
Hidden in these crepuscular skies
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Date Submitted: Mar 29, 2009 (11:24 AM)
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  Poetry Love
04/29/09 (11:22 AM) 
wow. I am speechless here...

  big josh
04/13/09 (04:42 PM) 
damn I have on words for this except amazing, nice write :)

  Jody
03/31/09 (09:20 PM) 
last few lines really did it for me... I'm readlly diggin' these challenges.

  Dimplez
03/30/09 (06:28 PM) 
wow...this piece is ridiculously deep lol, I had to read it like 4 times & kept getting diff messages from it OMG!!! You're descriptiveness & personification of the body parts is sick yo, you really did your thing with that. The picture added an excellent touch as well. Bravo for quite the masterpiece!

  B. Rose
03/30/09 (01:17 PM) 
Whoa!!! This is what the hell im talking bout I honestly to read it twice to fully grip the concept... because the wrods were used in a way... that you MUST go in depth with your mind yo... you took this challenge and ripped it... no lie... loved it..

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