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"forever standing in lifes puddles"
  by B3yond R3d3mption
  - This Poem is a response to the poem Standing In Forever's Rain by AR-15




press play...shoutout to ar..had to respond ur shit was sick as hell bruh

standing in forevers rain...paining words I mumble
for when I stumble im sitting forever n rain puddles
seems life is a game..n im left out of the huddle
for when im handed opportunity I drop it and fumble
depression becomes routine..as I silently scream
sitting endlessly deafened from these loud dreams
these dreams..are living fading realities
turned from immortality to unlikely casualties

sitting n the puddles of regret and sorrow
endure it today and repeat it tommarrow
watching the world spin..as I revolve counter clockwise
ur worlds upside down to me its down upside
in a reverse mind state backwards like rewind
dodging these thoughts of mine that violently collide
sitting forever n the darkness of life
hidden n the shadows forgotten by the light
it seems the harder I try n more I fight
the more I stray away from the path that's right

laying in the futures past
thinking about questions I dare not ask
can I finally forgive myself..perhaps?
or is that b3yond my grasp
if life is a learning experience..why isn't it a class
how turn to bronze to brass when ya last
so at last I ask
how mend the past when its a sculpture of broken glass

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Date Submitted: Oct 05, 2008 (03:05 PM)
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  ~* La Princesa...
11/21/08 (07:48 PM) 
I CAN RELATE.. ESPECIALLY TO "I\DEPRESSION BECOMES ROUTINE AS I SIENTLY SCREAM" AMD THE OTHER ONE "IT SEEMS THE HARDER I TRY N MORE I FIGHT THE MORE I STRAY AWAY FROM THE PATH THATS RIGHT" THIS ONE LEFT ME SPEECHLESS TEN AND A FAVORITE.

  Dimplez
10/20/08 (09:05 PM) 
last line= absolute KILLER!!!! omg this is an excellent response...two great poems, but yeah, you had a great flow man and the song went well with it!

  poetrys peace
10/07/08 (05:13 AM) 
**speechless** ....this touched me on so many levels its unbelievable! ....the word play was hectic....the depth outstanding!

  AR-15
10/05/08 (03:12 PM) 
Incredible response, bro.. classic shit.. No need to comment further. Thanks for the shoutout

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