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"GS Documentary"
  by Guey2


Three GS Billionaires had a conversation about an auspicious fellows comments.
One said the guys persistent need for attention made him sick to his stomach.
Another said he would check him out but dudes poems are consumed with dumbness,
plus his bad grammar and punctuation was beyond the beyondness.
The last one simply proposed an experiment that they all sorta wanted.

See the dude the mentioned only possessed one thousand points in his collection
Their experiment was how would he change if more came into his possession
Thinking people always change upon fake wealths calm reflection
they observed dudes comment box as it changed being careful to avoid detection

April 3, 2008: (1,000 All Time Points)
Wow im so amazed at your raw talent and skill. You really are good with the concept kill. You words all seem to give build. I wish i was as good as your are for real. You could probably get a record deal. Or something cause your words give me chills. That last part made me squeal. i think your really blessed with the gift.
Wish i could write the emotions your heart feels. Cause inside my own only anxiety builds.

[ private message to everyone looked like- Please check me out. Read my poems all the way out. And give some advice in where my skill is in doubt.]

April 20, 2008 (50,000,0000 All Time Points)
Okay this one here is nice. Pretty good i feel its mood its vibe. Its like your poured out this poems inside. What a great way to describe life. The song you picked really glides. And the ending had me oh so surprised.

May 5, 2008 (150,000,000 All Time Points)
I see where you went with the end. Its tight i might look like you put a lot of work in. the concept is ill and the plot is working. This one has real skill for certain. Last poem u id had my feelings hurting this one right here is dope for certain.

[Private messages to some looked like-Come check me out read comment and rate. You might dig what i have to say. Some dope messages and some clever wordplay.
U might even decide to stay.]

May 15, 2008 (600,000,000 All Time Points)
Okay i like what you wrote. I almost hung onto every word that you spoke. But in the second stanza you misspelled an old quote. By the by u missed an i and u need a comma before dead broke. Heres eight big ones though.

May 30, 2008 (800,000,000 All Time Points)
Hey okay i kinda like this one. But it seems like you got the message all wrong. And why'd you pic that song. It conflicts with your message its words are to strong.

June 4, 2008 (9,000,000,000 All Time Points)
{yawn! you get a one.}

June 6, 2008 (10,000,000,000,000 All Time Points)
You suck this dumb

The three people who documented this. Never got satisfactions lift. because somewhere along the line dude surpassed them due to their own risk. They types him and told him what the real truth is. He didn't respond so they three turned on each other and split. Telling the third one its your fault that were all ticked. We should have just minded our own business. The dude continued own writing till he got bored with it.
{Private messaged some friends and said what would happen if we gave random points to some kid.}

~Absolute Power Corrupts Absolutely~
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Date Submitted: Jun 08, 2008 (07:13 AM)
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comment icon  COMMENTS (9)
  getchamndrite
08/25/08 (03:49 AM) 
LOVED it. *sits and contemplates*

  TonySouthern
08/21/08 (12:54 PM) 
This was a great piece for reading no doubt mi spitta. Tight work fa sho. Keep doing ya thing. One love

  ephemeral
06/12/08 (10:18 PM) 
I am almost at a loss for words. The concept and subject matter are excellent. I can certainly relate to the message you offered in your analogy, yet another age old addage but even truer today than it was when first uttered. Excellent write poet.

  DOMINICANPOET
06/11/08 (11:39 PM) 
loved it no doubt and yet so true

  Sum-Thyng Like...
06/10/08 (11:58 PM) 
wow.....

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