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"He woke up. ."
  by Shaded eyes


"He woke up. . ."

u wudnt beleive what those words mean
the releif behind them of pain unseen

first time she cried after all of this
she wants her big brothers hug and a kiss

and i guess ull never know the tears we cried
all the sleepless nights leaving us so tired

and i cudnt beleive the words that were said
i felt like id battled an come out half dead

tears met my eyes as my back hit the wall
sobs held back as i began to slip and fall

tears welling up i sat on the ground
newly made friends gathered around

and my thought went to you every single day
things i had thought, words i wanted to say

i could read people thoughts bit by bit
people thinking. . what if this is it?

but i guess you showed them all
and il gladley feel the fool

cuz all that matters is that you woke up.

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Date Submitted: May 09, 2007 (07:09 AM)
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  mykah
05/13/07 (11:24 PM) 
shit you got alot of comments on this, and its because its so true, i know ive commented on this already-but i just love it. all your other poems fail in capacity to this one, it feels so real. so your gona have to work hard to write a poem that can live up to the standards of this one. so beautiful. and bens a good guy, im glad he came out of his coma, cuz i knew it was hurting you so much.

  ballad
05/12/07 (08:19 AM) 
yo dat was really deep... it sure was quite an experience... deep words... nice flow... :)

  nikishab
05/12/07 (12:58 AM) 
Your poem touched me deeply. I had a moment in my life where I was looking for my brother calling his cell phone leaving hime messages. Just to find out that he didn't wake up. There is nothing better than a brother keep him close

  camelsoccer_15
05/12/07 (12:16 AM) 
this is beautiful. i feel every single word and its deep and filled with emotion. this has to be up on the top list of poems i have in my mind. its the context behind the poem and emtions that matter. you brought it out with every single word and i truely loved this write. it deserves 10 stars alll the way. i dont care what anybody else says this was an amazing write.

  The Truf
05/11/07 (08:06 PM) 
i glad that he woke up for you. this is a very heartfelt piece. not even so much about rhyme and meter as content and message. which you got across beautifully

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