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"Her"
  by Sunkissed25


i'm not jealous
when you simply are so obviously obvlivious
to the way she lights up our room
i noticed making my way from our bathroom
scaling through the body's in our place
the crowd, the music, my security faded away
when I saw how close you felt you needed to be
to her face
I hated her right away
i didn't know how to act or what to say

just be calm
breathe
they just talkin and thats ok

but soon the room seemed miles away
and I
along with the background
got to watch as your chemistry
fired up
and scorchingly made most of the sound
party ppl now looking around
whispering about the obvious desire you both seemed to have to be elsewhere
kissing
I wondered what I had left you missing
and what it was about her that left it so easy for you to dismiss me
at our party
you let me die down in the background so obvviously
now i probably
gotta whoop this bitch ass for leaving fingerprints on my territory
and be the top spot story on the damn news in the morning

"GoodMorning Folks..have we gotta story..two barely make it out of a local residential party"

you blow me
call me jealous
but i'm a "color purple hex" kinda crazy
but you'll see
the crowd is ceasing
they know the deal and are leaving
all saying to themselves and believing
"he gone think twice next time before he so obvioulously thinks about cheating"
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Date Submitted: Nov 21, 2008 (11:40 AM)
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  .:I WILL NOT B...
12/01/08 (02:39 AM) 
by the end of this it was clear that all rationaliy had left your mind and that it was totally consumed by anger. i like the way you opened this poem and all the descriptions throughout. veryv vivid imagery.

  Swallowed Scro...
11/27/08 (08:47 PM) 
*exhales* ma, you took me back in time to when i felt this way you can scratch the wanting to whoop her ass because at the time i was actually secure *shakes head* or deluded, either one :p i love how you created this atmosphere like i was you watching it all go down and experiencing everything you went through- you can tell a good one ma! lol i wonder if i had whooped her ass would it have turned out different? *shrugs* maybe my "nonchalant" attitude had him thinking that i really didn't care *...
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  kinnaird
11/24/08 (10:13 AM) 
great job. love the description and the diction in this piece. very well written and weel worth the read!

  Gifted Pen
11/21/08 (03:18 PM) 
This was really good but I think it was less about her and more about jealousy or jealous love. Nevertheless, every point was right on the mark and each line moved closer and closer to the interest arousing subject. Great job. I wish I was as good as you.

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