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"IT WAS A LIFETIME DECISION"
  by stlpimpin27
  - This Poem is a response to the poem PLEASURE 1ST by Eryn


I REMEMBER THAT DAY
OOOH THE WAY THAT I FELT
SHE TOLD ME I MADE HER HEART MELT
I WISH I TOLD HER THAT DAY
BUT I DIDNT I COULDNT
SHE THREW ME OFF MY GAME
BUT IT'S NOT HER I BLAME
IT WAS ALL ME, IWAS IN CONTROL
I JUS WANTED HER LEGS OPEN
TO RECEIVE THE PLEASURE
IT WAS A LIFETIME DECISION
THAT I MADE ON THAT DAY
I FELT SO FREE
WHEN I CHOSE HER TO BE MY GOAL
NOW IM JUS PRAYIN AND HOPIN
SHE DID NOT GET MY TREASURE
SHE TOL ME SHE WAS PUTTIN PLEASURE 1ST
NOT HINKIN ABOUT THE VERY NEXT DAY
WHEN HER KIDS AND HUSBAND WOULD B 1ST
IT'S GON B MY NAME THAT SHE CURSE
ALL BECAUSE OF THAT 1 DAY
I DIDNT TELL HER I WAS GAY
BUT THAS NOT THE WORST
I CALLED IT MY TREASURE
BUT ITS NOTHING OF THE SORT!!!
I WAS TOLD I HAD AIDS
ON THE VERY NEXT DAY
AND THAS Y IM CUTTIN MY WRISTS WIT THESE RAZOR BLADES!!!





that was the end! i'm putting this footnote on here because ppl r confusing me wit the character in the poem! that aint me i jus wrote what i felt based off the poem i responded 2 so i am not gay or suicidal!!!
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Date Submitted: Jan 18, 2008 (04:22 PM)
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01/19/08 (09:50 PM) 
ok once again...this uppercasing thing is translated oftentimes as screaming...ur rhyme scheme is so elementary...i mesn fasm...u could have tried harder...this is just too simple...like a 3rd grader did it...if u put more effort in...I am sure u can do much better....once again try and fuck wit sum alliteration/in rhyme...as well as thought and u'll be ok....much love

  Eryn
01/18/08 (11:24 PM) 
WOW!!! THAT FLIPD THA SCRIPT ON MA POEM! I LOVE THAT!!!! U LEFT ME SPEECHLESS AGAIN! DANG IT!!!!

  rightwoman1
01/18/08 (08:46 PM) 
man.......this is way deep an unexpected flip on the other poem very insightful i like i like

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