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"Let Me Cry,Let Me Carry This Pain"
  by loren


Without you life is worthless.
Without you life is senseless.
You are my half part so.
Without you how could I feel alive.
I just can’t figure out why did u skin me alive.

The day you have left me.
My brain stop working.
My heart stop beating.
How could they ?
You are my thought process.
You are my breath.
You are my world.
Without you nothing exist only darkness all around.

My tears are silent.
But they are hiding worse pain.
When my tears fall.
They say my heart have a huge hole.
My lips are silent.
But my heart moan your name.

The tears are cry.
I tried to hide.
Coz you are not here to wipe.
Why would you wipe?
So ,Let me cry, Let me carry this pain.
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Date Submitted: Nov 25, 2008 (09:41 AM)
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  Hyper
12/05/08 (08:07 AM) 
wow this poem is cuz it sounds a lot like me too cuz without you I am worthless and without you life is senseless too. I know that you will always be here for me. Keep up the good work. I Love You. 10starz

  Stoykes
12/04/08 (03:25 PM) 
please tell me that this is just your creativity causing you to write this. this is sad. i hope it isn't personal. but if crying helps, do as you must. very touching. ~Stoykes

  Joetic
12/04/08 (03:22 PM) 
The emotion in this poem was beautiful but for one thig you need to go back and work on the typos and just revisit this one cause in some places the flow falls off ...umm i know this is an emotional peice but where most people mess up is just letting them feelings take control then the poem turns more into a letter than a poem the hard part is to not let the letters just fall on the page you have to lear to place them where they arent expected and where you want them read a few of my poems for e...
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  Mindfully Driv...
12/04/08 (03:05 PM) 
"my tears are silent/ but they are hiding worse pain/ when my tears fall/ they say my heart have a huge whole/ my lips are silent/ but my heart moans your name" by far an ill stanza and the whole thing was really deep. great work.

  Divine Beauty
12/04/08 (03:04 PM) 
damn. definately a excellent write. i felt ur pain screaming through this piece.

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