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"Looming Ambiance"
  by Shadowed Thoughts


These voices…
They speak out to me,
Clarifying the fallacy
Of the ambiance that keeps being fed to me,
That keeps breathing down my nape
as if hoping to wrap its breath
Menacingly around me;

Like beautiful balloons looming over me
Causing brief delight and happiness,
While their ribbons entangle themselves
Around my neck strangling my esophagus;

And I just want to rest peacefully
Upon this chair.. or that chair,
Or even the one way off over there,
Just for a moment and let the delusion
Fade away but these voices…
They just don’t care,
and so I step up into the air.
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Date Submitted: Oct 07, 2008 (01:57 AM)
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  ComplexConfess...
12/08/08 (11:28 PM) 
This piece was oozing that dark feel, but you know what added that much more of an effect for me? The balloons you mentioned. For some reason, the contrast makes it so astounding. Here, you have someone sinking into the very depths of darkness.. seeking an end, it seems. Then thoughts of that end come about, aided by balloons. Reading that bit was akin to seeing a sudden splash of colour in a completely darkened room. I suppose it's the association.. yin and yang, with one overpowering the other...
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  Ordained Misfi...
11/11/08 (04:30 PM) 
Rarely do people explore the realms of the "Gothic" experience... but I appreciate you for stepping outside the norm

  Isis sun
10/14/08 (01:24 AM) 
This is so...Salvador Dali...Escher..rolled up into one..hmmm..I need to start exploring gothic more..you;ve left me thoroughly intrigued...

  STYLES C.
10/13/08 (09:28 PM) 
Normaly i don't do gothic... but you made this a welll worth read

  Esoteric
10/13/08 (07:53 PM) 
I'm over stuck!! I like to read the entire poem before I really pay attention to the background and you got me over here bugging...it's funny how you can get different messages from one write. Because I was thinking of someone being happy but messy ass people couldn't just let you chill on cloud nine but then after I saw the pic and read it again it's like someone who wants peace but her own inner spirit just refuse to let her rest

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