Nickname:Blaqmermaid Country:United States City:Beltsville State:MD Gender:Female Age:30 Member Since:Sep 13, 2008 Last Login:Nov 18, 2008 Poems Submitted:21 Average Ranking: Poem Comments:99 Poem Views:853 Member Comments:9
Commented on the poem "Frontin'" on 10/08/08 at 10:57 PM
I enjoyed this. Honest, raw, and indignant. I love the way you broke up the 'hook of this piece'. Somehow if "This is a front" was on the same line it wouldn't have the same effect, so I really liked the spacing there.
"I hide behind masked anger because the pain in my heart shouldn't be seen by the competition." Sis these three lines spoke VOLUMES for real. Women nearly always see one another as competition, even if the next sista couldn't be further removed from the situation. Raw insight. Loved the spacing. Well done.
Commented on the poem "Saline Solution" on 10/08/08 at 10:23 PM
Okay...I'm gonna challenge you on this one. Are you sure you're not overly concerned with the 'look' of the piece and totally neglecting the concrete images that prevail beautifully in your other pieces. How does this title work? Is the saline the cause of the crying or is it self-inflicted? If the answer is the latter, why the saline solutions? I need some explanation on this one.
Commented on the poem "Damn!!!" on 10/08/08 at 10:13 PM
A. Clever B. Crafty C. Witty D. All of the above. The scancron portion of this piece was the most effective. I wonder if the first stanza would connect to the entire piece a bit more if you used a similar exam pun. The first stanza and the last almost seem like they could be two separate poems. Even so, it's an incredibly creative piece.
Air stiffens and falls.... incredible image. This piece oozes profundity. It's neat, flows like butter and the lines are cleaner than an Obama speech. The double entendres speak volumes. Outstanding piece.
Commented on the poem "Fucking Love" on 10/06/08 at 11:29 PM
Too damn clever for your own damn good. This piece was beyond witty, beyond crafty, and unbelievable. I have to pause before I call you a genius cuz I know you azz is crazy lol. Amazing piece. This made my day LOL.
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Commented on the poem "Frontin'" on 10/08/08 at 10:57 PM
