I love the content of your poem. It's motivation, and the ease of words within a poet's spirit. It's about the pen, the most reliable source of a poet's work. The most common tool. With that said, the only critique I would give would be grammar. I see this a lot in the poetry that circulates about this site. The words themselves are dope, but the structure lacks a little something here and there. So, for content...I give you a 10. For structure, I give you a 4. 7 stars total, love.
Commented on the poem "Falacy" on 02/26/09 at 08:26 PM
I love this poem, and the message is pristine. The only criticism I would give, would be to utilize more grammar points into your poetry. Reading this was kind of halting. No periods, no points of rest, not knowing where exactly you should step down the ladder, and how. It's was just a free-fall. So, on content, I give you a 10. In grammar, I'd have to give you a 5.
Commented on the poem "" on 02/09/09 at 04:58 PM
Oh lawd, I'd much rather hear this lol, there's so much that can only be emphasized by the cadence and tone of voice...But I love it ^_^+
Commented on the poem "Kiss From A Rose" on 02/09/09 at 05:09 AM
I love the concept/content of the poem...it seems like an ode/parody to the song. Keep writing ^_^+
Commented on the poem "Lost Time" on 02/02/09 at 08:16 PM
Tiny beads of secrets? As if each droplet of water held a hundred things left unsaid. I love this...I'm coming back with a response.
Performance.
February 02, 2009 at 03:47 PM
Knicks Poetry Slam 2009 Semi-Finals.
I didn't advance, but it was 1) the first time I performed in front of a live audience with judges...and when I actually got on stage, I wasn't that fazed...2) I had the greatest time. And if you look on youtube (anything with Knicks Poetry slam 2009 in it) and see all the OTHER dope poets? You'll know why.
So. I want critique on the performance. It means a lot to me...
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Commented on the poem "A PUBLISHER'S PEN........." on 02/26/09 at 10:32 PM
