Nickname:Mr. RTJ Country:United States City:From the lost regions of... State:VA Gender:Male Age:23 Member Since:Apr 19, 2007 Last Login:Dec 04, 2008 Poems Submitted:215 Average Ranking: Poem Comments:2,577 Poem Views:21,925 Member Comments:852
last line summed it all up. at the end of the day, it matters not what others say. so long as you can look at yourself and know the truth and persevere on, that's it. good stuff. really poured your heart into it.
Commented on the poem "Matilda" on 12/01/08 at 05:34 PM
not going to lie, the beginning struck me one way, but as i continued i saw the switch in thought. like a monkey on the back. like eyes peering into the back of the head. the influence that should not influence. that second guess of such, "makes me wonder why the bad is so easy to try" very deep, makes you hold on to what beliefs are held to further fight a powerful demon with sweets that end sour. good stuff.
what a pleasant delight to come home to. this shows true passion between two. desire to please the other on a moment's notice. good picture painted as well. good stuff.
very nice, really loved the personification placed inside. "your fingers greedily touch my sweet juices." creating the illusion the body parts had a mind and sexual desire all their own. very visual as well, at points could close the eyes and witness it infront of those closed lids. and a beautiful collaboration of body parts as the two worked off one another. making one reach a higher level of stimulation created higher stimulation in the originator. all in all great stuff.
this very creative. the symbolism was so jammed packed i couldn't imagine one more piece that could be included. very descriptive of the constrasting emotions of two to each other. yet the contrast pulls the to together. good stuff homie, you could see the feelings.
The end is Near...
November 26, 2008 at 11:11 PM
Reflecting in the rearview of existence...
Watching time fly by hoping that is not my sole destination...
The attempts to live a life worth living...
Struggling to leave a legacy as insurance of immortality...
Existence not only then... also now... and onto forever...
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Commented on the poem "becuz u onli thought u dnt kno" on 12/03/08 at 02:31 PM
