...i enjoyed this thoroughly Broken! how greed became a living entity...you really were flawless in your depiction. The tone and how it spoke- it made my stomach churn but also instilled a kind of "fear" in me like...do i listen to this voice too? compelling in the least Broken. I enjoy how you push me with your pieces, they make me search myself and highlight things i need to change. That's why i enjoy your darkness so much babe because you make me see and rectify what needs to be corrected *soft smile*
umm...wow! i am going to detach myself abit here so i can focus on the write. I remember reading a book once that was so very explicit about an orgy that was going on. It was a cult [devil worshippers] and that was one of their monthly gathering sessions *shakes head* i remember feeling intrigued and disgusted at the same time, abit confused too why i would be so intrigued. I guess it appealed to my...more animalistic pleasures and that made me look at myself with disappointment but the fact remains, there is immense darkness in us that challenges on the daily and we have the control to withstand it. When it comes to lust? of all 7 sins this is the most advanced! what i just finished reading is an actual everyday thing for alot of people and i'm left feeling...tainted. Don't get me wrong, even though i've been celibate for a couple of years i am not immune to the temption but i try as hard as i can. You personified lust in this and to be honest with you? seeing it like this makes me not want any part of it...call me sappy [proudly] but i want that warm, passionate, sensual and only 2 people type of loving lol
...well...Broken? graphic as always lol i know it's been awhile since i've stopped by babe and what a shocker to have this as your latest piece LOL@myself ooh well...but okay...on the write itself? i can always trust you to be very vivid with your imagery- and even though this is not my usual reading and when it comes to erotica i prefer the more...abstract kind...well, not 'too' abstract but i have to say that...hell! lol everyone's a freak, i know i am even if i choose to carry myself a certain way lol
*But not entertaining in the sense that i want...* sorry for the typos- that's what i get for typing faster than i can think *slight chuckle* i'm toned, i don't have complete control anyway lol
i'm with the concensus- one of the best pieces in the chain- though i admit, i do need to read some more but from what i have read *shakes head* this is phenomenal! shoot, i was trying to tone it down and not come across too excited and show you how much i am 'really' feeling this one *chuckles* because i tell you now ma, i read this like...shoot, like more than...well, several times and that's plenty lol for real, it was like that! i sunk that much deeper each time...picturing everything, watching it in my mind as if it were a movie and i was loving that shit- blown away by it, so many gruesome, heartrending images but i was loving that shit like...Running Scared type shit and excuse the language, i'm kinda shocked at it too lol but i toned and so i guess that's probably another reason why i just won't stop talking *shakes head chuckling* the realism was literally, like a slap in my face reminding me that this actually goes on, that...there are people out there, maybe some we've seen, we know, we've glanced at, that have lived or live like this...going to happen to them and it's terrifying and utterly, heartbreakingly sad that it's a truth. I know i'm going on but...completely overwhelmed by this, truly ma, i'm loving how graphic, real and, dare i say, entertaining you made this. But entertaining in the sense that i wanted popcorn with coke *blank face* but that...chair gripping, tissue pulling out shit kind of "entertainment"...maybe the better word would be overpower[ed]. I only said entertainment because you were so on point with the imagery that i was actually watching it and i know i said that before so i better just stop talking and end this comment LOL damn, talk about novel :p respect poet! much!
Changes...And Some...
December 02, 2008 at 02:23 PM
I like to edit my own pictures and so I will be putting up my own artwork rather than displaying anymore photos of myself. I've decided I want to go back to being a faceless poet- I find I have alot more freedom with anonymity and quite frankly, unless they are artistic, photos are, to me, an utter distraction. These are my views and mine alone. If you don't like what I have to say, click off my page.
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We all have preferences, yes, I know that and no one has any right to judge what is substantial and..."real" when it comes to expression. However, my views on poetry and simply writing remain as such. Anyone can write, I do not hold that against a person, but poetry is an artform of expression, one that is much like a sculpturor's incisions into his carving, done with much care and timely detail. This is where I draw the line with poetry and simple, writing. If you do not bleed [this basically meaning, feeling some form of passion] in your poetry then I'm sorry, it is plain writing to me and I cannot, for any reason, allow that to be called poetry.
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When I go to work I go with the mindset that I am there to work and not to socialize. Though I do not gain too many friends this way, that is fine by me. As long as I am hardworking, genuine, punctual and reliable, I need no other form of "interaction". It doesn't entirely work out as planned though, because sometimes I tend to forget my "supposed" immunity to human interaction and embrace one and all, even despite how others might view me, for I am proudly sensitive and compassionate- sometimes I fear, too much. Which is why I like to go within myself alot, to...recover, if you may and I simply bring this up because it is my current mindset.
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I am not that conceited to think I am above others, nor do I think that this is my world and everyone else just "lives in it" as someone so candidly stated. I take much care in how I carry myself and how I choose to be viewed. This is not necessarily caring what others think, rather, it is what I think. If you find this being "fake" well then, maybe you should stay away from my page *chuckles* and I care naught for such energy on my page anyhow. I log onto this site for one thing and one thing only. Poetry. I do not want to have to worry about politics and cliques! Though I have a select few I consider close, I am a respectful person and will never deliberately shun anyone nor their work but as I said earlier, I have preferences. Also, I am not here to be a groupie nor gain any- it is merely pure appreciation for word and all it encompasses. I could give two twats about the going ons on this site! and yes I take pride in my work- who doesn't?
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With that said? [.:Peace & Tidings To One And All:.]
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