damn im definitely feelin dis piece. i love thugz mansion && tupac and u definitely showed mad skillz in dis. the flow was tight, right, && on point. yu said some powerful things and had a really strong mansion. i can tell that you really mean what yu're saying and have passion for wat ur preaching. damn. ten stars and a fav
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♥terrena
"how can you claim to be heartbroken when your heart is somewhere else" hmms ok dat can happen. i mean too bad it does, but ive been there. and im sure u hav too. its like ur heartbroken but u hav to try to move on so u gotta b wit dat person and fall for dem maybe and blahblahblah. but wow...da last line. 'dont try to kill urself too fast.." dats really sad and bitter and pathetic. it REALLY is. it makes this emotional poem "broken, empty, weak".
Commented on the poem "EMPTY" on 12/28/08 at 10:10 AM
okay lemme start with "crying you are river just gave you a way to build a boat giving you my heart just gave you another toy to play with giving you my time just gave you time to waste giving you my love just gave you another thing to take away from me..." awww i love dat part. it kinda sums up things ina way. i love da meaning behind those words. and the acrostic is good. i like dat. and da part "would it be that you let me leave or i let you go?" hmms i think we all ask ourselves that question in these times, but da sad part is dat...we usually let da person go and den wonder about it everyday for the rest of our lives and feel sry for ourselves. ok, maybe not dat deep. sometimes, but i dnt wanna say dat cuz it sound pathetic. okay, neway. dis was deep. but i think theres another side to consider..for u to consider i mean. lol
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♥terrena
wow. this is amazing. you had wonderful imagery. with each word, each line, each stanza, i could imagine wat was going on in my head. you have such a way with words. i could think of a million ways to say what you're sayin in a simple way, but u jus made it sound so...soundable?? idk. lol da part where yu said "violent candy painted shades of confusion or possibly staring into an empty reflection of himself" i
wow...speechless//. i loveeee this! its like....idk. it gave me dis unexplainable feeling of confidence bekus its a ..confident poem. lol its like a person wit dis....aura, dis emotion, dis swagGa, dis freshnesssS sumtin! lol omg i love the third and fourth stanzas. LOVE them "that achey-breaky-heart nonsense xoxo i h a t e y o u" damn. dat makes heartbreak sound good! lol i love dis who thing. ten stars!!!!!!!! MORE MORE MORE oh, and perfecto ending!
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♥terrena
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Commented on the poem "Thugz Mansion (EnJay'z Verse)" on 12/28/08 at 11:51 AM
