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"..take a bow...[dis-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d]"
  by imperfect beauTy
  - This Poem is a response to the poem I’M LOGGING OFF NOW by HOLLA @ UR GURL


[[ scene 1-take a bow]]

Curtains opened
and
upon that stage

intricate snippets,
intimate tidbits
of our life, elaborately played

Onlookers reveled,
envious of our theatrics,
not a single pair of eyes,
that followed our performance, remained dry, ''we'' were all optics craved

memory making moments, stolen
captured,
and to my photographic archives collection,
eternally,
is where they shall be saved

Everyday,
you were my ''feature'',
as I flaunted your portrait,
on my hearts front page

----------

...as the lights dim
and
with the vanishing of the crowd

The show is over
take a bow...

----------

Applause echoed throughout the theatre,
crowds roared with excitement

Vulnerable, I went into this, just learning, on true loves stage, what ''fight'' meant

A conveniently forgetful you, continuously forgot your que, so I would gently nudge,
hoping that you'd recall your part

..as the feature actor,
sole captor,
of my heart...

Kindness caused speculation for me
to be viewed as weak

But, within trusts absence, void is truly, into love, taking a leap

I prayed that you'd remember your every pertinent line

You know...the ones, rehearsed in private,
vowing that you would always be only mine

--------

But it seems,
scripts are unraveling,
and you're ad-libbing now

..the show is over
take a bow..

--------
[[ scene 2-disconnected ]]
--------

That little clip,
That makes the phone line fit,
perfectly in place, secures its hold

..broke off long ago

And so...

Its become as painfully simple as a coin toss as to whether we hit or mis[s]communication

as outer interference takes its torrid toll
and the rejection of bad reception
leaves room, along with open wounds
for mis-interpretations, manifestation

I pinch my fucking fingertips,
tightly around that little plastic clip

and pray to God,
my grasp doesn't slip

Or the trickling of tears, doesn't flood my palms and loosen my grip

But...SHIT!!!

Nervousness, has me starting to perspire

As the other hand clasps phone pressing redial,
to no avail,
my soul is beginning to tire

And I've become hoarse from the strain on vocals leaving voicemails
as my heart keeps screaming its lonely cry

...I
wonder why...

If we're together, a
nd lines threaten to sever
...I feel so very alone

And why you refuse to answer the phone

Loves fool..?
loves guinea pig, loves trial run, tool...?

I gave you all of me...the best...

and all the rest..

til nothing of me was left


and honesty, was all I asked

Hand slips, for one, in a unit of two, to hold on, proves to be, that only me, cant handle the grueling task

and tears fill my eyes as the
chord falls to the floor,
A heart lie neglected
.
....
.
.dis------connected.

-----------

I signed on for nothing more than love,
and in return all I was left with is a battered ego,
shattered spirit,
dismantled soul, broken heart and dreams

...to move on, I know NOT how

..the show is over...baby, take a bow...

we're disconnected and I, too, am logging off now.

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Date Submitted: Jul 21, 2008 (12:01 PM)
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  MzFyne_N_Bless...
08/16/08 (04:06 AM) 
Wow...I am SPEECHLESS, this was a GREAT write, BEAUTIFULLY written. A job well done although it is not exactly a job to write about your emotions or the experiences that you go thru but it is a gift..and u have a AMAZINGLY way of using it. Ten starz, great comeback....Wow!!

  Angel
08/07/08 (02:00 AM) 
I'm loving this concept. I have to be honest, I thought you were going in a different direction with this one. My own fault for not reading the poem before it, but what's done is done. You're quite the story-teller... or perhaps these aren't stories... lol (let me stop meddling...) I'm gone... good write.

  porkchops
08/05/08 (01:42 PM) 
hmmm everyone else already said all the good stuff about the poem the only thing i must say is i think i will love it even more if you did it in audio excellent write ma

  XPERIENCE
08/02/08 (12:52 PM) 
damn everybody loggin off LOL.. nah but shit ive been there auntie... U shouldda had rhiannas joint playin with this... "A conveniently forget you, continuously forgot you que, so i would gently nudge, hopin that you'd recall ur part" I actually pictured that in my head.. nicely done!

  LiquidFire
08/01/08 (09:31 AM) 
Idk about everybody else but because of my emo state as of right now I'm bout ta damn cry. I took this and ran away with it in my mind, as always perfection ib, what can't u do?! Lol

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