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"The fall didn’t kill me; it was when your love suddenly stopped {AREA 25 TITLE CHALLENGE}"
  by leethal
  - This Poem is a response to the poem The fall didn’t kill me; it was when your love suddenly stopped {AREA 25 TITLE CHALLENGE} by Group: AREA 25


The fall didn’t kill me; it was when your love suddenly stopped
{AREA 25 TITLE CHALLENGE}

I fell in love but forgot to
Get up
You eva had that kinda love
That kept your pillow wet up?
Emotions wouldn’t let up
Right after first dates
Tried to run from her love
But it was too late
I knew this would create
Many problems
But she promised that her
Love would always solve them
My world revolved then
Around her
When I hit that ground I
Found her
Her love is that unopened
Parachute
Blind, unconditional love is
What I compare it to
I’m scared too boo, but will you
Always be true
Will you borrow something blue
When you say I do
I knew this love was too good
To be true
When I finally lowered my wall
It allowed me to see you
And oh what a rude
Awakening
My heart was only yours
For the taking
But in this case
Breaking
ACHING
Faking
Forsaking
Just lust and mistrust, not love making
Now I ask myself, “How could she
Do this to me”
It’s not the heat that killed me
It was the humidity
Freely gave myself like
Your slave
I would trade my life for
Your grave
But your days belong to you
And your nights to another
Heart aches to discover you found
Another lover
Don’t get me wrong, that fall was
A BITCH!
But I died at the precise moment
Your love quit

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Date Submitted: Sep 28, 2009 (03:29 PM)
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  angelistic
09/29/09 (10:10 AM) 
wow i understand that perfectly. iy sux when the one u call ur heart has found another

  Hart N. Soul
09/29/09 (01:25 AM) 
I can't help but feel you on this man. The poem hits dead on bruh. "Don't get me wrong, that fall was a BITCH! But I died at that precise moment when your love quit" Brilliantly written sir.

  Planted Daisie...
09/28/09 (11:42 PM) 
wow lee that was impeccable....flawless at best....your pen has improved so much over the past few weeks... i am truly impressed.....the emotions were captured perfectly....fave

  Untouched_Soul
09/28/09 (07:06 PM) 
"When I finally lowered my wall It allowed me to see you And oh what a rude Awakening My heart was only yours For the taking But in this case Breaking ACHING Faking Forsaking Just lust and mistrust, not love making " BRAVO... I love the places your mind will go when penning a piece!

  Athena317
09/28/09 (03:44 PM) 
But your days belong to you And your nights to another .. where did you find that selfish bitch? LOLOL it is always such a hard dose of reality when someone ends up being something totally different than they presented themselves as!

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