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"The Pavement"
  by justntyme


Heavy footsteps upon the pavement
I’ve been here before
That same solemn feeling has crept inside my head
One too many times
Maybe this time’ll be different
Maybe this time we’ll be indifferent
Can you look me in my eyes and tell me I don’t deserve to cry
Or even release a sigh
Knowing what happens next cause we’ve been here before
We can call it karmic destinies or just uncertainties
But I don’t wanna talk about the you and I’s
Or excuse me, the U and me’s
Because some things must and often do end tragically

Beneath me, my feet still beat the concrete
Walking in circles
Just knowing there is no way this process can be stopped
Thinking….
Clocks ticking…
Time is running out!
And I still haven’t figured out what this is even about
Poor pavement, it sure has taken a beating
Especially at times when I’m yelling and screaming
But right now I can’t stop thinking
So the concrete is gonna have to just have to bear with me

What happened to us?
I thought surely we had enough to make it
Looking down at the busted pavement
Surely I did not crack it with my paces.
I imagine it did so from my faces
Man of all the places…
Where did we go wrong?
I can’t even think anymore cause Now
the concrete is in too many pieces.
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Date Submitted: Jan 21, 2009 (09:14 AM)
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  Snugasaglove (...
07/09/09 (01:40 PM) 
THIS WAS HOT! I really loved the pavement motif. Also loved your expressive language. GREAT PIECE!

  Doughboy
01/22/09 (09:57 AM) 
That pen back pushin.. adn this was a great write. Realism, one going battles with thyself... often does have us going through the motions!!! That Concrete Pavement can break babe, but it can also be put back together! nice deep emotional write!!

  Big B00
01/22/09 (12:54 AM) 
VERY DEEP WRITE FLAWLESSLY WRIITEN IM IN AWE.

  Jonathan Robin...
01/22/09 (12:34 AM) 
excellent....I have read this several times today. I was grasping every sensing element of this incredible prompt. Superb job!

  touchdapearl2
01/21/09 (11:47 AM) 
Where did we go wrong....that line stood out the most to me..Its so hard to love and unstable person,but its easy to stick around and try and help them while stressing one's self! I like how you used the word PACE, to show how long you ponder the thought of if this is healthy for you to keep getting sucked back into the same ol bullshit....this was a very very realtable piece! its a fav!

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