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"WHEN I"
  by DeeDee8908


BEFORE I KIZZ YOU

YOU WILL UNDERSTAND, I AM OF VALUE, WORTH SUSTANING, HAVE EVERLASTING LOVE, ALL IN ONE, NOT JUST ANOTHER GURL

WHEN I KIZZ YOU

LETTING YOU KNOW, I ADMIRE YOUR BEING, DESIRE YOU FROM HEAD TO TOE, IT’Z NO RANDOM GESTURE, ESTEEM, AMOUNT OF ADORATION LAUGHZ AT ATTEMPT TO MEASURE

AFTER I KIZZ YOU

YOU WILL SEE, THE DEPTH OF MY MIND, SPIRIT AND SOUL, INTENSITY, ZEALOUS BLIZZES, TAKING HEED TO GREATLY REALIZE MY PASSION DOESN’T JUST RESIDE IN MY EYEZ, NO VERBAL SUM FOR MY KIZZ, AND IF WE DRIFT, AMONGST MANY OTHER THINGZ, IT WILL BE ONE OF THE MOST THAT WILL TRULY BE MISSED

BEFORE I DIE

HAVING BEEN ALL THAT I COULD BE, ATTEMPT TO CHANGE MIND SET OF AMERICAN SOCIETY, EXECUTE TOTAL, FIREY DESIRE IN ME

WHEN I DIE

I WILL BE REMEMBERED FOR MY REMARKABLE STRIVE REGARDING EQUAILTY, CHANGE AND FREEDOM, BEINGZ RIGHTZ, LEAVING MY FOOTPRINTZ IN THE SAND OF THIZ WORLD

AFTER I DIE

MANY WILL SEE, HOW I LIVED MY LIFE, SPARKING A CHANGE IN THEE, WHILE I AM 6 FEET DEEP, WHO I WAS AND WANTED ON EARTH, STILL RUNZ STEEP
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Date Submitted: Apr 21, 2009 (12:41 AM)
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  Trill
08/03/09 (01:21 AM) 
diz one is nice.i luv diz one rite here.u killed it and revelaed da truth.

  big josh
06/08/09 (01:20 PM) 
this was an excellent piece and it was an enjoy to read I love the concept, this was a very good write, nice job :)

  MR. BYRD
06/05/09 (02:26 AM) 
great piece...I see the structure is getting better..keep it up...

  Devin Dion
06/05/09 (01:34 AM) 
I loved this piece. The choice of words you used made everything flow so easily. I loved every part of this poem. You spelled sustaining wrong at the top though. Great write. 10

  CUNTRYBORN
06/04/09 (12:58 AM) 
BABY, THIS IS A GREAT PIECE. ONE THING I WILL SAY IS I WOULD HAVE SEQUENCED IT A DIFFERENT WAY. LIKE, BEFORE I KISS, WHEN I KISS, AFTER I KISS, BEFORE I DIE, WHEN I DIE, THEN AFTER I DIE. JUST A LITTLE CRITICISM FOR YOU. PUT I LIKE IT. THIS WILL BE ONE OF MY FAVS.

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